Weekend Writing Warriors – 02/03/2014

Hi all,

It’s Sunday again – where does the week go? – and I’m once again joining in the Weekend Writing Warriors hop. This week, since I’m working up to going back to rewrites on Psychic Shadows, I thought I would ‘go back to start’ and share an excerpt from one of the early chapters. This shows Shannon and David reaching their first uneasy truce – how long do you think it’ll stay ‘strictly business’? 🙂

Her gaze held his for a long moment; he found himself shifting uncomfortably but he didn’t seem capable of looking away from those hazel eyes. They had tiny gold flecks in the centre and he had the oddest feeling that they were looking inside him. Right down into his soul, and he really wasn’t sure that was such a pretty place anymore. Then she nodded sharply once.

“Fine, but we’re equal partners in this investigation, you share all credit with me and I want complete honesty to any questions I ask. That is my only and final offer, and if you go back on it then I don’t care how high up your friends are, I will make your life a living hell.”

He nodded, but she barely acknowledged it before she was turning away. Her voice was back to brisk and professional as she stalked towards a nearby desk, issuing a stream of instructions as she went. David stared after her. He’d got what he wanted so why did he rather feel like he’d been pole-axed – like she’d seen inside him and taken his measure.

Really hope you enjoyed 🙂 I’ll leave you with some writing motivation for the week ahead (or a rather worrying glimpse into how things are going for me so far!).

1002350_1455980984616562_989235194_nAnd don’t forget to check out the other great excerpts here

Happy Sunday x

11 responses to “Weekend Writing Warriors – 02/03/2014”

  1. Ooooh, she’s tough! lol, to inspire a man to feel like he’d been pole-axed! Nice! Good 8 🙂

    1. Thanks Teresa! Yup, she’s definitely a tough cookie, a wee bit too much for her own good at times lol! Glad you enjoyed x

  2. I like him! Think it was this line that did: “Right down into his soul, and he really wasn’t sure that was such a pretty place anymore.”

    1. Thanks Eleri! I have a bit of a soft spot for my tortured heroes, and David has definitely had more than his fair share to deal with.

  3. I think I like her. She’s not gonna take crap off anyone.

    1. Thanks Millie. Yup, Shannon def doesn’t take any crap – he’s not gonna know what’s hit him 🙂

  4. She sounds like a strong woman! IMHO: I’m not sure you need to repeat “looking inside him” and then “seen inside him” (in the 3rd paragraph), but I LOVE “wasn’t sure that was such a pretty place.” Great insight into his character.
    This is my first time on Weekend Writing Warriors so I’m not sure what kind of feedback I’m supposed to give! I’m enjoying everyone’s excerpts.

  5. Lots of character reveal about both of them in this. Very well done and certainly makes one want to read on and find out more.

  6. Interesting, she’s so strong and it seems he might have some hidden vulnerabilities but either way, I like it! Great snippet!

  7. Very nice character reveal. Great tension between these two. I think he’s got his work cut out for him.

  8. Intriguing interplay here…. from how he described her eyes (gold flecks), I got the idea that he was attracted to her. But as the 8 sentences went on, he becomes intimidated by her. A good, complicated relationship to keep the reader’s imagination and curiosity humming.

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